- Dialogue (all those "thou"s)
- Pace
- Contractions - Apostrophes in the wrong place.
- Make Kate more badass - more backstory
- Change ghost visualizations - more ambiguity
- Kate's motivation for leaving the cross
I decided to push back the open to show the shipwreck actually taking place, and hoping that improves the pace. And a flashback to the Toby and Kate fight will hopefully pick up the pace. All I can do at this point is try.
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